Thought on Arena: Ryu-Kentoshii Hirokima VS. Alther Primus

[Victoria]

Compared to: http://thefinalfantasy.net/forums/ro...ess-decay.html

I'd have to say that your battle is a travesty and gives RPBing a bad name. Sure, you guys still need to experience and learn how to actually write well, but I'm too blunt and unforgiving to let that slide.

Very bad. On the scale of 10, your battle is a 0.
By all means, if you want to improve, I can give you tips and pointers, on one condition. You actually listen to the advice. >.>;

And as a free, sample first pro tip: Stop using asterisks and write out the details of what you're doing.

PS: I'm aware that the RP/B forums are mostly dead, so you have no real actual examples of what a real RPB is, so I somewhat forgive the fact that you don't have any references to go off of.