I have never sung in my life and don't intend to inflict the horror of such an experience on anyone, living, dead, or otherwise. Hence why I put that disclaimer. It's a lot harder for me to 'hear' a song in my mind by reading lyrics, so I'm only really able to process it as I would a normal poem.

Although I would still consider at least keeping it to one tense instead of jumping around.

~DragonHeart~