I see that you are putting more description in it, but you still need more.... Umpf as some may put it. Like Buhumat. What did he look like? What distingushed him most of all. His color. His rage? What did Sephiroth feel at the time when he didn't know how to save the city? Lost, hopless? It's alot better but there could still be more detail. I'm not criticizing you or anything by no means. I'm just giving you some advice. I'll write and example of what I would have written....

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Sephiroth made his way across the country to Midger. The great city sparkled before him as he approached. But as he drew near the havoc that had been wreacked by the mighty Buhumat grew visable. The once great city was on the brink of extinction. As if it last breath was being inhaled. The foot of Buhumat on it's chest. Extinguishing it's very essence. The battered and torn bodies of the Shinra lay around the wreckage. The men, dressed for battle had fallen valiantly in the fight. SOLDIER operatives lay broken and bare along with their comrads. The brutality of Buhumat knew no bounds. Thoughts of how to kill the beast filtered through Sephiroths mind as he stared at the carcus of a dead Shenra. A sight he had seen far to many times. The bitterness and hate formed inside him. A combustable tank inside an inferno ready to explode with the slightest push. As Sephiroth gazed on in his trance. The mighty Buhumat had taken flight. Far above the warrior the beast had been searching for more lives to take. For this was his sole porpose. To take lives. Buhumat had spotted Sephiroth with keen eyes. With a bat of his wings he made the long decent toward the earth. Building the fire within his chest he let out a deafining roar and let lose his fury. the fireball made its way toward Sephiroth. The bright object with flames of blue red and orange forming a tail behind it. So bright even to break Sephiroths concentration. He looked to the sky and came to the realazation that he would be killed. With split second reaction he threw his the palm of his had out before him and uttered the word "Blizzaja". A rocket of ice flew from his hand. Flying through the air with the valocity of a bullit. The two elements collide sending fire and ice shards flying in all directions. Sephiroth sheilding his eyes from the speacticle of light lost sight of his opponent. As the light faded he realized that Buhumat had dissapeared into the horizon. But in his mind Sephiroth knew this battle was far from over. A cheif from the SOLDIRE devision appeared out of the wreackage of a building and rushed to Sephiroths side. " You are here" The Cheif exclaimed. " Thank the heavens, Buhumat has destroyed a fourth of the city and we were starting to lose hope". " The entire city will be destroyed if we don't do something soon sir". Sephiroth stares into the distance. His white hair flowing around him in the breeze. He grips his sword tighter and clenches his teeth in anticipation of the fight. Call everyone off Cheif. I'll handle this. The Cheif looking at Sephiroth in amazment pulles his walkie talkie from his belt and walks away squaking order to the SOLDIRE unit to pull out. Sephiroth takes his first step toward the Buhumat. Not knowing stratagy or tactic. His mind blank as though it were completly erased. As he walks he closes his eyes and sees his son's face. " I do this for you son" he says in a serene tone. " For you".

[QUOTE]]"My version:
While at home, Sephiroth Jr. [I will call him Jr.] was watching the news channel with a blond hair SOLDIER. To Jr, this SOLDIER was pretty tall compare to him, and much strong too!


While watching the news, he saw his father fighting Bahamut [I'm gonna give Sephiroth a fighting arena] in Midgar Slums.

"Go dad!" exclaimed Jr, smiling brightly, full of pride for his father. The blond Solider said: "You got a great father, you know." he smiled at the young boy. "he saved Midgar and Shinra many times." The blond man frowned, holding his hand out to the boy. "I'm Cloud, by the way." The boy beamed.

"Sephiroth Jr! Nice to meet ya!" ~
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MagitekElite's was very good so I used his for he last part.