Cheesy title. I know. So sue me.

For a while I've been writing little pieces of poetry here and there and I finally decided to post my own poetry thread. Do give me your guys' opinions (both good and bad) on what you think of them.

Here's my first two:


Shadow Knight
Shadow Knight, Shadow Knight.....
My shadow comes out to me,
And starts to fight
Taking over and now in control,
I start to change and refuse to console
Into the darkness of the night
I see a reflection of myself in the mirror
With the moonlight lighting up my room,
I look closely
Mad and furious,
I punch it and break it
Flustered and Agitatated,
I break down and cry
The tears finally come out
I just cry and I want to shout

I've been holding this all in
Now I'm letting it all go
I finally let the people I trusted,
I just gave them the right to know
Crying out tears of exhaustion
And my blood pouring out renewability
I just lye down
Pondering and thinking about what I've done

I cry out to myself
Thinking that I really need some help
I see my blade looking torwards me
I stand up and walk towards it
As I'm walking there's this part that's confused
I pick up the blade
I put it back down
And I soon start to frown
Why am I not hurting myself?
Why did I stop myself?
I just.....I just let it go
I put down the blade
I walk to my bed
Alive and not dead
I start to fall asleep
Tired and reliefed
The Shadow Knight fades away
I'm back to myself
And it is time that I stay


Weak and Alone
Weak and alone,
Oh so sad
The thought of delusion
Makes me mad

Persuaded by my thoughts, trapped within my fears
The cloudy atmosphere within, makes me shed no tears
The day is young and so am I
Everytime I smile,
It is just a lie
Clumped by my pain,
Clotted by my inhumane

Weak and Alone
Destructive and Bold
Darkish Heart,
Covered Ice Cold........


What do you guys think?