Noctis Lucis Caelum
True Master of Darkness

I know that he wasn't. I was just saying that when he does come into the picture dont just whackem and move on.lol. Try to build up to the fight. Give Sephiroth or Sephiroth Jr a reason to kill him. Remember that the antagonist has to be pwerful to piss of sephiroth.lol. Just think it out before you write it. and when you write it, read over it and think of what extra emotions you could put in it to make it better. I don't mean name every color that is in that part of the story or anything. That is going to far. Just put some emotion and detale into it and it will work out fine.

Well you could use mor sensory detales. You know the usual see, youch, smell feel, ect. Tell the expressions they make the movements, how they feel, You know.. Basicly if you were in their position write what you would do, what you would think. what axpression you would have. what you would feel. How you would move. Body language can also be read and not just seen. It might take time to write all of that out but people will be more interested if they have something that has emotion in it. Just tell what you would do in each charicters situation. At this point in the story that is. If there is a battle later on tell what you would do as the protagonist. But don't go and kill the main Antagonist quick. put some drama in it. Peple love drama.lol. Or alot of them do.

I just got fiished reading it. I can give you some advice if you would like. I majored in Literature and English.. But only if you want it.

I just read it. I liked it. there could actually be a very good plot there. I think in an entire story it could be good. I might write one myself.. On what I have no idea yet but I'll figure it out.lol

I'd rather find out about it thanks. ^^

Cool, will his son be at the Mako Reactor?

Other than that though, you can tell it'll turn into a interesting story.

It's pretty good! Except, wouldn't he call his son Sephiroth JR?

The website is great!

Ok, i'll keep modifying. for about 30 more min's.

Ok, I broke it down into sections so that it is easier to read now. it doesnt seem as long and you can read which rule you are looking for.

did you read over it. I tried to cover all of our bases and I locked the site so that it couldnt be modified unless you are an admin. the users can only view it. I think I got it all on there. Phew

I have added a rules and regulations to the ROS site. i think I covered everything.

Oh yeah, okay! On my way!

I'll have a try!