Well I am enjoying the tale T.G. It has a different feel to it compared to the stuff I normally read, but I have enjoyed reading the first two chapters. Keep posting it up.

I like how you make mention and explain the simpleness of the events that happen. In the last chapter making the point that Oskar gets energy from another source than food. It seems like making those references makes the story flow simply and isn't drawn out.

I do notice that sometimes you use the same word repetitively.
Quote Originally Posted by T.G. Oskar View Post
As he tensed his muscles to lift his body, Oscar felt an unusual spark emerge from his body, touching the metal bar.
To me when I read it, it always stumps the flow. I think replacing the second "his body" with "it" might flow better. That is the only thing that caught my eye though.

And to all you who will read this...comment on T.G. Oskar's story. He wants the attention hahaha.