Aye, Fixed. It still works with the character. Better?
Gunblade? Sorry R.Kyra but no guns. Gunpowder isn't invented within the RP. Other than that you're good to go.
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Aye, Fixed. It still works with the character. Better?
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Well you could also remove the 'has advanced shooting skills' since without guns, it wouldn't make much sense. xP
Other than that it looks good, I think.
Fixed again.
I'll see about getting a post up. I have a few exams this and next week. Midterms in the middle of summer. This doesn't seem right.
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@Angel: You know...you didn't have to make your whole post consist mostly of quotes from the other characters.
Just sayin'.
Oh comon, not that much of my post was quotes <.< More than I'd usually do, but still not that much.
For Our Lord Sheogorath, without Whom all Thought would be linear and all Feeling would be fleeting. Blessed are the Madmen, for they hold the keys to secret knowledge. Blessed are the Phobic, always wary of that which would do them harm. Blessed are the Obsessed, for their courses are clear. Blessed are the Addicts, may they quench the thirst that never ebbs. Blessed are the Murderous, for they have found beauty in the grotesque. Blessed are the Firelovers, for their hearts are always warm. Blessed are the Artists, for in their hands the impossible is made real. Blessed are the Musicians, for in their ears they hear the music of the soul. Blessed are the Sleepless, as they bask in wakeful dreaming. Blessed are the Paranoid, ever-watchful for our enemies. Blessed are the Visionaries, for their eyes see what might be. Blessed are the Painlovers, for in their suffering, we grow stronger. Blessed is the Madgod, who tricks us when we are foolish, punishes us when we are wrong, tortures us when we are unmindful, and loves us in our imperfection.
You call about 50% of your post 'not that much'? >.> Seriously, look at it again. Compare the italics and the regular text. It's about half and half.
And really, you shouldn't be doing it at all. I used to do it, but I stopped.
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I looked at it, in great detail at that o.O
155 words quoted, 689 characters (without spaces).
220 words not quoted, 1005 characters without spaces.
Roughly 41% by word count, 40% by character count. Q.E.D., not a majority of the post. Again, more than I'd usually do, probably didn't need to quote a couple of the non speaking lines, which I did go ahead and remove, now only 109 quoted words, and 474 characters, making it 33% by word count, 32% by character count. Not that I thought it was a problem at 40%, but if everyone else does, I can certainly knock that down a few percent without losing anything meaningful from my post. In the future, I'll aim to keep it to 20% or less.
For Our Lord Sheogorath, without Whom all Thought would be linear and all Feeling would be fleeting. Blessed are the Madmen, for they hold the keys to secret knowledge. Blessed are the Phobic, always wary of that which would do them harm. Blessed are the Obsessed, for their courses are clear. Blessed are the Addicts, may they quench the thirst that never ebbs. Blessed are the Murderous, for they have found beauty in the grotesque. Blessed are the Firelovers, for their hearts are always warm. Blessed are the Artists, for in their hands the impossible is made real. Blessed are the Musicians, for in their ears they hear the music of the soul. Blessed are the Sleepless, as they bask in wakeful dreaming. Blessed are the Paranoid, ever-watchful for our enemies. Blessed are the Visionaries, for their eyes see what might be. Blessed are the Painlovers, for in their suffering, we grow stronger. Blessed is the Madgod, who tricks us when we are foolish, punishes us when we are wrong, tortures us when we are unmindful, and loves us in our imperfection.
So I was right; it was about 50% of your post. And really, it's better to keep it at 0 if you can.
I mean.. all you have to do is just be more descriptive with your character's immediate surroundings, and your character's perspective from what the other people are saying. Your character's reactions and stuff.
Just suggestions, though.
Usually seems to flow better when answering to statements individually to be answering to direct quotes rather than paraphrases, but there are other ways to do it. I actually usually don't quote very often at all, only started doing it more here because I noticed other people doing it in most of the RPs I've seen. I can certainly cut back on that.
For Our Lord Sheogorath, without Whom all Thought would be linear and all Feeling would be fleeting. Blessed are the Madmen, for they hold the keys to secret knowledge. Blessed are the Phobic, always wary of that which would do them harm. Blessed are the Obsessed, for their courses are clear. Blessed are the Addicts, may they quench the thirst that never ebbs. Blessed are the Murderous, for they have found beauty in the grotesque. Blessed are the Firelovers, for their hearts are always warm. Blessed are the Artists, for in their hands the impossible is made real. Blessed are the Musicians, for in their ears they hear the music of the soul. Blessed are the Sleepless, as they bask in wakeful dreaming. Blessed are the Paranoid, ever-watchful for our enemies. Blessed are the Visionaries, for their eyes see what might be. Blessed are the Painlovers, for in their suffering, we grow stronger. Blessed is the Madgod, who tricks us when we are foolish, punishes us when we are wrong, tortures us when we are unmindful, and loves us in our imperfection.
What bothered me the most was the fact that you didn't just quote the character's words, but just copied the whole line of text, including the character's actions and whatnot.
Looking back, I don't really remember why I did that, I can't think of any meaningful purpose to having those lines in my post. Most likely it was a mistake I didn't notice, whatever the reason, it's gone now.
For Our Lord Sheogorath, without Whom all Thought would be linear and all Feeling would be fleeting. Blessed are the Madmen, for they hold the keys to secret knowledge. Blessed are the Phobic, always wary of that which would do them harm. Blessed are the Obsessed, for their courses are clear. Blessed are the Addicts, may they quench the thirst that never ebbs. Blessed are the Murderous, for they have found beauty in the grotesque. Blessed are the Firelovers, for their hearts are always warm. Blessed are the Artists, for in their hands the impossible is made real. Blessed are the Musicians, for in their ears they hear the music of the soul. Blessed are the Sleepless, as they bask in wakeful dreaming. Blessed are the Paranoid, ever-watchful for our enemies. Blessed are the Visionaries, for their eyes see what might be. Blessed are the Painlovers, for in their suffering, we grow stronger. Blessed is the Madgod, who tricks us when we are foolish, punishes us when we are wrong, tortures us when we are unmindful, and loves us in our imperfection.
I'm not sure whether or not to just go for it and post even though I'm still a bit behind right now or to catch up to the plot. It'll make sense in a few posts though. I just have so many ideas in my head, it might be hard to compile them all into one post. What do you all think? Do you mind if I catch up later?
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It doesn't take that long to catch up to the plot. Just read anything Lucid or Hyz posted. If you've read everything they posted, then you pretty much already caught up. I'm not joking either.
Yeah, I've skimmed it. And I've gathered that they haven't left Sol yet Is that right?
I'll probably post something sometime today or tomorrow. Don't quote me though. I get sidetracked when the weather is nice.
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Yes, that is pretty much the gist of where we're at. The 'meeting place' for everyone is basically Sol.
Yeah Lucid and Hyzen are like the main conflict as of now. My character has a lot to go through before he groups up with anyone.
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Loaf, great stuff. I wondered when you'd post . Good to see everyone back. I think myself, Lucid and Heartless need to combine posts now, the short ones are distressing me. Lol.
Oh, Lucid and I are working on a seperate post too.
Victoria and Freya I'm loving your relationship.
Keep it up guys.
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I'm always ready to write up some stuff! *Starts writing up something*
I guess I'll start up a joint post for us and send it to you two.
I've been trying to get a job, and the jobs I'm trying to get want me to work like 50 hours a week. But I'll have more time to post now!
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50 Hours a week is pretty damn good, dude. I wish I could find something like that, lol.
I've been reading over the IC and OOC, and have spoken to Sheena about joining this Rp. Is it still open for new posters? I'm actually interested in joining it.
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Yes, yes it is. R.Kyra is a new joiner as well, but has yet to post due to RL events. xP
So I think you'll be fine, Ruin. XD
I'll draft up a Character Sheet then. I'll post it sometime tonight if possible.
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Ahmmmm, I'm still here. I'm going to have to make a second profile. I just can't explain him any other way, plus I feel I can write about him as well.
(tbh, his name came from a spelling mistake and sort of stuck.)
Here he is:
Aden Adzuki
Age:25
Personality: Very kind. He will take one of the most negative of situations and try to put a positive spin to it. He tends to stay very calm in any given situation. Even when things seem tough. Little is known about his past, but he has lived in Cro and surrounding area his whole life. He became a Professor at Cro at his earliest opportunity. He is also Rya's mentor and close friend.
Appearance: Tall, standing at 6". He has short brown hair, usually a little spiked at the top. Medium but muscular build. He wears a black pair of slacks, a black tank under a blue trench coat which resembles that of a Cro Professor. He teaches Magic Manipulation and History.
Weapon: Staff. Wields boundless ice magic. He also has a simple broadsword which is kept under his robe. He doesn't use it very often.
Please let me know if this is okay.
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Sounds fine by my standards. ^^ I'm sure if Hyz or Lucid have a problem they'll say something.
Name: Isaac Havok
Age: 20
Personality: A young man with a complex personality, Isaac is usually explosive and quick to anger. From a young age he had issues controlling his powers, which stems as a result of inability to control his rage. He normally isolates himself from others, giving a cold, harsh outward appearance. He does this in an effort to avoid making any connection, from which he is afraid of being hurt.
Appearance: Standing at 6 feet even, he has bright white eyes that easily startle everyone that notices. He has bright blond hair that reaches to his waist, which he lets hang freely. He often wears loose fitting trousers, and a black tank top. He also wears wrist and arm bands that reach up to his elbows, and fingerless gloves. He wears rubber soled sandals, to help ground himself off.
College: Fize
Weaponry: Isaac uses a Wakizashi, or a Japanese short sword. He favors quick, clean kills rather than a drug out fight. He has his sword customized to have a metal hilt, to channel his electricity through the sword if needed.
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Looks good to me, Ruin. ^^ Guess I'll wait for Lucid or Hyz to say something if they have an issue with it.
They sound okay to me.
Figured I'd make a second character, and here it is.
Name: Nyx Validus
Age: 24
Personality: Nyx's primary mode of living is focused internally, where he deals with all things with cold logic. His secondary mode is external, where he learns more from intuition than experience. He seeks clarity and understanding in all things, and his sharp mind and cool use of intellect make this an easier task than it would seem. He values knowledge above all else, and his mind is constantly in search of it. He places little value in people's opinions, or even on what others see as established facts until he has given them a great deal of thought and either accepted or rejected them. He loves new ideas and possibilities he hadn't previously considered. He often seems detached from reality, when really he's just lost in thought, musing over ideas most would never have had. He often gives up on projects before actually finishing them, once he knows the solution after applying his powerful mind to the problem, actually implementing it doesn't interest him. He places absolutely no value in beliefs held on the basis of personal subjectivity or feelings. He sees emotion and personal beliefs as irrelevant to Truth, which is all that matters. Because of this view, he is generally out of tune with the emotional needs of others, and is ill-equipped to meet them.
Nyx lives the majority of his life within the confines of his own mind, contemplating the possibility of the impossible and unexplored. Unfortunately at times, he finds that the real world pales in comparison to this, and therefore has little itnerest in maintaining relationships with people. He is generally quiet, and even somewhat shy around people he doesn't know well, but opens up once he deems a person worthy of hearing his most profound thoughts. The few he deems worthy, he becomes extremely close to. He has great difficulties understanding the emotions of others, or expressing and sometimes even identifying his own.
He has little interest in leading or following, and resolves most interpersonal conflict by deffering to his opponent, as it saves him a great deal of time and effort, and most of the time, he never really cared who won the argument anyways, he already knew he was right.
Appearance: Nyx stands at about 6'1", and has long black hair, and pale blue eyes. He has a shortbeard, though it's not a fashion statement, he just doesn't remember to shave more than once a week or so. He is somewhat muscular, but built more for speed. His wardrobe conists of a dozen or so identical black robes with blue trims, and identical black pants. He cares little for what he looks like, but he finds these robes comfortable.
College: Cro
Weaponry: He can create any weapon he desires from unnaturally dense magically infused ice.
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